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Writing in the first person can be a fun challenge, allowing you to explore a first person point of view on the page. You may write in the first person in a short story, novel, or opinion piece. Creating an effective first person narrative requires skill and consistency as well as a thorough revision of the writing once it is done.

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Use present tense to move the story forward. The first person point of view has two different tenses, present tense and past tense. Present tense “I” focuses on the actions and thoughts of the narrator as they unfold in the present. It can be a good option for moving the story forward, carrying the reader through a narrative as events and moments are happening.^[1]
- For example, a first person present tense narrator would be, “I open the window and yell at him to leave me alone. I close the window and try to focus on the latest soap opera on television.”
2
Try past tense to explore a character’s past. The past tense is a good option if you are writing a story that explores the main character or narrator’s past. It is a more popular tense than present tense and is often easier to do. Writing in the past tense can make the story feel more like it is being told, rather than happening in the present moment.^[2]
- For example, a first person past tense narrator would be, “I opened the window and yelled at him to leave me alone. I closed the window and tried to focus on the latest soap opera on television.”
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Go for present tense when discussing the work. In most cases, the first person point of view is not recommended for an academic essay. But your instructor may allow you use the first person when discussing a work of literature or a scholarly work. Use the present tense to give the discussion immediacy and an intimate tone.^[3]
- If you are using APA style, you can use the first person point of view to discuss your research steps in a research paper. For example, you may write, “I studied sample A” or “I interviewed subject B.” In general, you should avoid the first person point of view and only use it sparingly in your research paper.

1
Give the narrator a distinct voice. First person narrators often have a particular way of seeing the world, which is based on their backstory. Give your first person narrator a narrative voice that is distinct and particular to them. Consider the narrator’s age, class, and background. Use these elements to create the voice of the first person narrator.^[4]
- For example, if your narrator is a Latino teenager who lives in the Bronx, they will have a distinct narrative voice that may use Spanish phrases and teenage slang as well as standard English.
2
Filter the actions of the story through the narrator. With a first person narrator, you want the reader to view the world of the story through their perspective. This means describing scenes, other characters, and settings from the point of the view of the narrator. Try to filter all the action in the story through the first person narrator so the reader gets a sense of their point of view.^[5]
- For example, rather than say, “I couldn’t believe what I was seeing. A killer spider skittered towards me and I thought, I’m dead,” focus on describing the action straight from the viewpoint of the narrator. You may write, “This couldn’t be what I was seeing. A killer spider skittered towards me. I’m dead.”
3
Use the “I” to keep the pace and action moving forward. Try not to let the first person narrator get bogged down by backstory or long descriptions, especially if you’re writing in the present tense. Keep the pace and action of the story moving forward. Focus on keeping your narrator in the action in every scene.^[6]
- For example, rather than write, “I tried to talk to Sara about how I felt but she didn’t want to listen to what I had to say,” you may put this content in a scene with dialogue and action. You may write instead, “‘Sara, why won’t you talk to me?’ I was determined to get her to listen to what I had to say.”
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Read examples of first person narratives. To get a better sense of the first person point of view, read examples of this perspective in literature. Look at present and past tense examples so you can look at how other writers use it in their work. There are several well known examples of the first person point of view in writing, including:^[7]
- To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee
- Moby Dick by Herman Melville
- The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald
- Lucy by Jamaica Kincaid
- «Shooting an Elephant,» an essay by George Orwell
- «The Death of the Moth,» an essay by Virginia Woolf

1
Avoid starting every sentence with “I.” Though you are writing from the perspective of the “I” in the first person point of view, you do not want every sentence to begin with “I.” Doing this can make the narrative feel repetitive and stilted. Try to vary up your sentences so you do not start with “I” in every sentence or have “I” in sentence after sentence.
- For example, rather than have two sentences like, “I ran down the stairs, my heart pounding. I could hear the killer spider skittering on the wall behind me,” you can write, “I ran down the stairs, my heart pounding. Behind me, the killer spider skittered on the wall.”
2
Do not report on the action using the “I.” Allow the first person narrator to describe a scene or moment from their point of view. Do not use the passive voice when describing a scene or moment through your first person narrator. This can make the narrative sound like a report or a summary of events, rather than let the reader experience the events as they unfold.
- For example, rather than write, “I bumped into Marsha and she told me she left her homework at home. I felt sorry for her and told her not to get so upset,” you may place the reader right in a scene.
- You may write, “As I turned the corner of the gym, I bumped into Marsha. ‘I forgot my homework at home,’ she complained. I put my hand on her shoulder and tried to comfort her. ‘Don’t be too upset,’ I said to her.”
3
Try not to place distance between the reader and the “I.” Using “I thought,” “I saw,” or “I felt” in the narrative can create distance between the reader and the first person perspective.
- For example, rather than write, “I felt sad about losing her as a friend,” you may write, “Sadness filled my body as I realized I was losing her as a friend.”
- You can also often simply remove “I thought” or “I saw” in a sentence to make the first person point of view stronger. For example, rather than write, “I passed her in the hall and almost stopped to talk to her. Then, I thought, why bother, she’s just going to reject you anyway,” remove «I thought» and tighten up the action in the sentence.
- You may write, “I passed her in the hall and almost stopped to talk to her. But I kept walking. Why bother, she’s just going to reject me anyway.”

1
Read the piece out loud. Once you have completed a draft of the story in the first person, read it out loud. Listen to how each sentence sounds in the narrative. Notice if you repeat “I” too often or in every sentence. Pay attention to the voice of the first person narrator and note if it feels consistent throughout the piece.^[8]
- You should also pay attention to the tense in the story. Make sure the story does not shift from present to past tense or vice versa. It should stay in the same tense the entire time.
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Tighten up the word choice and language. As you polish and revise the story, make sure your word choice and language is strong. Look for any words that you can replace with more unique terms. Check for any language that does not feel as clear or concise as it could be. Make sure your word choice and language suit the first person narrator in the story.^[9]
3
Show the piece to others. You should show your draft to others and get their feedback. Ask friends and peers to read the first person narrative. Have them give you feedback and apply their critiques to the story to make it stronger.
- You may also show the story to a writing group to get their criticisms and critiques. Be open to the feedback of others and use it to improve the first person narrator in your story.

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When the narrator is telling his story (in first person) in the past tense, how does he know when to use the past perfect tense? Can both of these be used together?

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How many characters should narrate the story?

You typically only have one person narrating a story at a time. Sometimes in stories the narrator changes between chapters or parts. If you do this, make it clear so not to confuse readers.

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Writing in the first person means writing from the perspective of one person or character. When writing, you’ll want to use words like “I,” “we,” or “me” to demonstrate it’s the first-person perspective. For instance, if you’re writing a narrative, you might say, “I called Marissa on the phone.” Avoid starting every sentence with “I” since this can get repetitive. You can also pepper in dialogue, descriptions of the scene, and action sentences to keep things interesting. If you’re writing a first-person narrative, you’ll want to make sure everything is told from the perspective of 1 character. This means that everything your character says and does should be consistent with their worldview. To learn how to polish your first person narrative, read more from our Writing co-author!

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Use present tense to move the story forward. The first person point of view has two different tenses, present tense and past tense. Present tense “I” focuses on the actions and thoughts of the narrator as they unfold in the present. It can be a good option for moving the story forward, carrying the reader through a narrative as events and moments are happening.^[1]
- For example, a first person present tense narrator would be, “I open the window and yell at him to leave me alone. I close the window and try to focus on the latest soap opera on television.”
2
Try past tense to explore a character’s past. The past tense is a good option if you are writing a story that explores the main character or narrator’s past. It is a more popular tense than present tense and is often easier to do. Writing in the past tense can make the story feel more like it is being told, rather than happening in the present moment.^[2]
- For example, a first person past tense narrator would be, “I opened the window and yelled at him to leave me alone. I closed the window and tried to focus on the latest soap opera on television.”
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3
Go for present tense when discussing the work. In most cases, the first person point of view is not recommended for an academic essay. But your instructor may allow you use the first person when discussing a work of literature or a scholarly work. Use the present tense to give the discussion immediacy and an intimate tone.^[3]
- If you are using APA style, you can use the first person point of view to discuss your research steps in a research paper. For example, you may write, “I studied sample A” or “I interviewed subject B.” In general, you should avoid the first person point of view and only use it sparingly in your research paper.

1
Give the narrator a distinct voice. First person narrators often have a particular way of seeing the world, which is based on their backstory. Give your first person narrator a narrative voice that is distinct and particular to them. Consider the narrator’s age, class, and background. Use these elements to create the voice of the first person narrator.^[4]
- For example, if your narrator is a Latino teenager who lives in the Bronx, they will have a distinct narrative voice that may use Spanish phrases and teenage slang as well as standard English.
2
Filter the actions of the story through the narrator. With a first person narrator, you want the reader to view the world of the story through their perspective. This means describing scenes, other characters, and settings from the point of the view of the narrator. Try to filter all the action in the story through the first person narrator so the reader gets a sense of their point of view.^[5]
- For example, rather than say, “I couldn’t believe what I was seeing. A killer spider skittered towards me and I thought, I’m dead,” focus on describing the action straight from the viewpoint of the narrator. You may write, “This couldn’t be what I was seeing. A killer spider skittered towards me. I’m dead.”
3
Use the “I” to keep the pace and action moving forward. Try not to let the first person narrator get bogged down by backstory or long descriptions, especially if you’re writing in the present tense. Keep the pace and action of the story moving forward. Focus on keeping your narrator in the action in every scene.^[6]
- For example, rather than write, “I tried to talk to Sara about how I felt but she didn’t want to listen to what I had to say,” you may put this content in a scene with dialogue and action. You may write instead, “‘Sara, why won’t you talk to me?’ I was determined to get her to listen to what I had to say.”
4
Read examples of first person narratives. To get a better sense of the first person point of view, read examples of this perspective in literature. Look at present and past tense examples so you can look at how other writers use it in their work. There are several well known examples of the first person point of view in writing, including:^[7]
- To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee
- Moby Dick by Herman Melville
- The Great Gatsby by F. Scott Fitzgerald
- Lucy by Jamaica Kincaid
- «Shooting an Elephant,» an essay by George Orwell
- «The Death of the Moth,» an essay by Virginia Woolf

1
Avoid starting every sentence with “I.” Though you are writing from the perspective of the “I” in the first person point of view, you do not want every sentence to begin with “I.” Doing this can make the narrative feel repetitive and stilted. Try to vary up your sentences so you do not start with “I” in every sentence or have “I” in sentence after sentence.
- For example, rather than have two sentences like, “I ran down the stairs, my heart pounding. I could hear the killer spider skittering on the wall behind me,” you can write, “I ran down the stairs, my heart pounding. Behind me, the killer spider skittered on the wall.”
2
Do not report on the action using the “I.” Allow the first person narrator to describe a scene or moment from their point of view. Do not use the passive voice when describing a scene or moment through your first person narrator. This can make the narrative sound like a report or a summary of events, rather than let the reader experience the events as they unfold.
- For example, rather than write, “I bumped into Marsha and she told me she left her homework at home. I felt sorry for her and told her not to get so upset,” you may place the reader right in a scene.
- You may write, “As I turned the corner of the gym, I bumped into Marsha. ‘I forgot my homework at home,’ she complained. I put my hand on her shoulder and tried to comfort her. ‘Don’t be too upset,’ I said to her.”
3
Try not to place distance between the reader and the “I.” Using “I thought,” “I saw,” or “I felt” in the narrative can create distance between the reader and the first person perspective.
- For example, rather than write, “I felt sad about losing her as a friend,” you may write, “Sadness filled my body as I realized I was losing her as a friend.”
- You can also often simply remove “I thought” or “I saw” in a sentence to make the first person point of view stronger. For example, rather than write, “I passed her in the hall and almost stopped to talk to her. Then, I thought, why bother, she’s just going to reject you anyway,” remove «I thought» and tighten up the action in the sentence.
- You may write, “I passed her in the hall and almost stopped to talk to her. But I kept walking. Why bother, she’s just going to reject me anyway.”

1
Read the piece out loud. Once you have completed a draft of the story in the first person, read it out loud. Listen to how each sentence sounds in the narrative. Notice if you repeat “I” too often or in every sentence. Pay attention to the voice of the first person narrator and note if it feels consistent throughout the piece.^[8]
- You should also pay attention to the tense in the story. Make sure the story does not shift from present to past tense or vice versa. It should stay in the same tense the entire time.
2

Tighten up the word choice and language. As you polish and revise the story, make sure your word choice and language is strong. Look for any words that you can replace with more unique terms. Check for any language that does not feel as clear or concise as it could be. Make sure your word choice and language suit the first person narrator in the story.^[9]
3
Show the piece to others. You should show your draft to others and get their feedback. Ask friends and peers to read the first person narrative. Have them give you feedback and apply their critiques to the story to make it stronger.
- You may also show the story to a writing group to get their criticisms and critiques. Be open to the feedback of others and use it to improve the first person narrator in your story.

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When the narrator is telling his story (in first person) in the past tense, how does he know when to use the past perfect tense? Can both of these be used together?

Yes, they can. Past perfect is intended to describe an event that happened prior to some other event: «I stepped through the door and suddenly realized I had been there before.»
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How many characters should narrate the story?

You typically only have one person narrating a story at a time. Sometimes in stories the narrator changes between chapters or parts. If you do this, make it clear so not to confuse readers.

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Большой популярностью в литературе пользуются книги, где герой рассказывает про себя сам. Такие романы и рассказы буквально погружают нас в другой мир. В личный мир героя. Но как писать книги от первого лица, что нужно, чтобы посмотреть на жизнь чужими глазами? Давайте на чистоту. Здесь нет ничего тяжелого. Просто немного творческой магии.

Зачем писать книги от первого лица?

Книгу такого формата пишут для того, чтобы показать события как можно более точно. Таким образом, сторонний читатель как бы становится своим. Он слушает рассказ героя. Ему хочется сопереживать.

Особенно популярными являются такие произведения в жанрах: любовного романа, эротики, фэнтези, магической прозы.

То есть там, где эмоциональная составляющая доминирует.

Как начать писать книгу от первого лица?

Чтобы сделать это, надо стать этим самым лицом. Вы должны понять, чем именно живет тот, о ком вы пишите. Что он может говорить, о чем думать. Что может скрываться в голове у такого человека или того, о ком Вы там пишите.

Причем вам стоит подумать, а что бы вы сами о себе рассказали. А потом надо перенести этот шаблон на героя.

Так вы добьетесь того, что повествование будет живым. И не будет возникать некой картонности. Кроме того, можно для начала сделать героя вашего пола и возраста. Можно даже дать ему похожее занятие.

Так вы напишите труд о себе, но только с другим именем и некоторыми данными. Писать будет легче.

Это станет неплохим почином в данном деле.

Как сделать книгу от первого лица интересной?

Чтобы добиться интересного эффекта, надо наделить героя необычными особенностями характера, психологии.

Надо чтобы ваш герой был не стандартным, не шаблонным. Чтобы он видел мир немного не так.

Только не делайте его полным психом, иначе это будет резать глаза. И не забывайте работать над самим сюжетом.

То, что ваша книга пишется от первого лица, еще не значит, что она будет простой. Вы не делаете никакого чуда.

А значит надо работать как обычно, по полной. Тогда все получится.

Полезные советы

Чтобы красиво рассказывать от лица кого-то, вам надо уметь перевоплощаться. Умейте примерять на себя другие маски.

Это как никогда важно. Не стесняйтесь. Ваш герой — это не вы. Отбросьте комплексы. Тогда книга будет легкой и занимательной.

Перечитайте пару таких произведений. Это позволил, как бы посмотреть, а что же там делают другие.

Начинайте с простого и постепенно усложняйте задачи. И, конечно же, умейте исправлять свои ошибки.

Смотрите на собственное творчество критично. Чтобы добиться такой цели надо просто раскрыть себя.

Научиться говорить от лица другого. Это уже часть успеха. Остальное сделает лишь ваше трудолюбие.

Как получить читательский билет ЛитРес?

Как начать писать книгу о своей жизни и заработать на этом?

Книги про властных героев. Почему они так популярны?

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Повествование от первого лица («я увидела зеленокрылую пупырку» вместо «она увидела зеленокрылую пупырку») невероятно распространено, особенно в сегменте подростковой литературы. Книги, таким образом написанные, активно множатся и плодятся, но не у всех авторов получается выдержать правильный тон. Тут и там приходится наблюдать, как рассказ превращается в оду себе любимому (то есть, конечно, не себе, а протагонисту, но мы-то с вами знаем…) в ущерб другим персонажам и даже сюжету в целом.

Проверьте, не воздвигли ли вы себе нерукотворный памятник?

Авторы, пишущие от первого лица, нередко начинают уделять своему протагонисту слишком много внимания, забывая, что те вообще-то не одни на сцене. В результате получается этакая цепочка я-я-я, раздражающая глаз и оскорбляющая чувство прекрасного. Попробуйте поиграть с подлежащими и разнообразить синтаксис.

Неправильно: Я сбежала вниз по лестнице, чувствуя, как бешено колотится сердце. Я слышала оглушительный топот и хрипы гигантского зомби за спиной. Впереди я увидела дверь в подвал, обещавшую надежное убежище. Я подбежала к ней, рванула на себя ручку и нырнула внутрь.

Правильно: С бешено колотящимся сердцем я сбежала вниз по лестнице. Позади оглушительно топотал и хрипел гигантский зомби. Дверь в подвал! До нее было не больше двух метров, а там — убежище. Я подбежала к двери, рванула на себя ручку и нырнула внутрь..

Все еще далеко от идеала, но, думаю, суть вы ухватили.

При повествовании от первого лица все, что вы пишете, является мыслями персонажа. Вроде бы очевидно, но не для всех. Некоторые авторы все равно продолжают лепить курсив, кавычки и атрибуцию, чтобы показать, что это мысли персонажа, а не… что-то. Чем это еще может быть?

Неправильно: Я не могла поверить, что это происходит на самом деле. «Гигантских зомби не существует, ведь так? — подумала я. — Должно быть, я сплю».

Правильно: Я не могла поверить, что это происходит на самом деле. Гигантских зомби не существует, ведь так? Должно быть, я сплю.

Мое любимое! Как просто, живописуя от первого лица, загнать все-все в авторский текст. Ведь именно так мы рассказываем истории друзьям — не разыгрывая сценки, не цитируя дословно диалоги, не меняя голос, позу и выражение лица в зависимости от того, кому принадлежит реплика (а если кто-то так делает, то лично мне уже на второй минуте хочется его придушить). Увы, беседа за рюмкой чая с подружками от художественного произведения отличается не только эффектом, оказываемым на печень. И тут придется кстати золотое правило: Что толку в книжке, если в ней нет ни картинок, ни разговоров?

Неправильно: — Что с тобой стряслось? — спросила Кирстен.

Я тяжело вздохнула. Она даже представить себе не могла, насколько безумной была моя жизнь. Ей бы никогда не пришло в голову, что за мной охотятся гигантские зомби — огромные, уродливые и вонючие. [Длинное описание гигантских зомби, жизни героини и ее дружбы с Кирстен]

Правильно: — Что с тобой стряслось? — спросила Кирстен.

Я тяжело вздохнула.

— Ты даже представить себе не можешь, насколько безумна моя жизнь.

Я убрала рюкзак в шкафчик и огляделась по сторонам. Коридор был пуст, но надолго ли? Наклонившись к уху Кирстен, я прошептала:

— Зомби! Гигантские!

[Остроумный, конфликтный диалог, из которого читатель сможет почерпнуть информацию о гигантских зомби, жизни героини и ее дружбе с Кирстен]

Повествование от первого лица — прекрасный способ завлечь читателя и быстро установить с ним близкие отношения. Но, как видите, не все так просто и интуитивно понятно. Всегда надо помнить о возможных ошибках и перекосах. Ну и о гигантских зомби тоже, разумеется, забывать не стоит. Берегите себя!

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